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[indri]

My life is extremely hectic at the moment and I'm still reviewing the comments that people made on Descent. Two points raised concerned the emotionally distancing effect of the voice and tone used in the piece, and the lack of drama in the fight scenes.

So I'd be very grateful if people on my Flist would link to stories (fanfic or commercial fic) which

are extremely emotionally affecting (especially if it's not shipperfic), and/or

have exciting fight scenes.

I'll study them and see how I can improve.

My thanks again to everyone who took part in the Concritathon and for peasant_ for running it.

Comments

[shapinglight]

I don't know if battle scenes are the same as fight scenes. If so, I recommend the Sharpe novels by Bernard Cornwell.

I actually didn't find Descent emotionally distancing.

[indri]

Batlle scenes are good too. I know there are many Sharpe novels at the local library, so I'll give them a go, thank you.

[shapinglight]

I find fight scenes very hard to write too, which is why I often wimp out and sort of right around them instead.

Of course, if one describes them in detail (as I once saw in one of the appalling 'official' BtVS books) it can be very boring indeed.