Concritathon
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peasant_ and deadsoul820.
This is my post forpeasant_'s Concritathon. Anyone who wants to give me public concrit for Descent is very welcome to do so here. Anyone who would rather send the concrit privately, my address is archaeoindri@yahoo.com.
According to the rules of the concritathon:
Concrit is Constructive Criticism. This means that it must point out at least one, preferably more, flaws in the story as well as at least one, preferably more, good points in the story. It must also be written so as to inform the author of your opinion without hurting their feelings.
Ta.
peasant_ and deadsoul820.This is my post for
peasant_'s Concritathon. Anyone who wants to give me public concrit for Descent is very welcome to do so here. Anyone who would rather send the concrit privately, my address is archaeoindri@yahoo.com.According to the rules of the concritathon:
Concrit is Constructive Criticism. This means that it must point out at least one, preferably more, flaws in the story as well as at least one, preferably more, good points in the story. It must also be written so as to inform the author of your opinion without hurting their feelings.
Ta.
Re: Concritathon feedback!
Date: 2005-10-03 08:49 am (UTC)You're quite right about my oversight regarding Spike's growing hunger. In an earlier draft he had eaten the pig, so I should have altered the text elsewhere when I changed this.
Spike driving the car into the water was an accident. Should be clearer.
Dawn found out about the AR after Villains but before Beneath You. Or at least, I presume that's why she threatens to set him alight should he touch Buffy (in BY). So I'm presuming here that Xander or someone has told her by the time she gets the call.
Thank you again for your comments. I'm sorry that my response here will come across as brief -- I'm running off in a minute to catch Serenity. I will use your comments to improve!