Examples

My life is extremely hectic at the moment and I'm still reviewing the comments that people made on Descent. Two points raised concerned the emotionally distancing effect of the voice and tone used in the piece, and the lack of drama in the fight scenes.

So I'd be very grateful if people on my Flist would link to stories (fanfic or commercial fic) which

are extremely emotionally affecting (especially if it's not shipperfic), and/or

have exciting fight scenes.

I'll study them and see how I can improve.

My thanks again to everyone who took part in the Concritathon and for peasant_ for running it.